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One Shining Moment

mickawber wrote me a lovely Elizabeth/Mr. Darcy Double Drabble which can be found HERE And so in return he requested that I write an HP couple that I had never written before and that there be mention of a "bathtub." I hope that antosha enjoys this one. I could have gone oh so many places with this prompt, but here is what I came up with:

Title: One Shining Moment
Characters: Ah just read it is only a drabble!
Word Count: 100
Rating: PG
Warnings: None

The baby splashed water from the tub, giggling and squirming in his mother’s soapy hands. Mother, his wife had been a mother for nearly a year now. He watched her long hair dance across her back as she laughed; the baby’s shining plump cheeks mirroring her own. But my ears, he has my ears, poor little bloke. She turned to face him where he stood in the door. Identical smiles, one so small, met his. Unlike the baby’s, hers fell as she met his eyes. She clutched their tiny naked son, drenching her chest.

“Alice, bring Neville. Dumbledore is here.”



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Apr. 21st, 2006 02:04 am (UTC)
Oh very cool. I loved that. Never thought about them that much either.
Apr. 21st, 2006 02:07 am (UTC)
Sorry forgot to sign in for that.
Apr. 21st, 2006 02:41 am (UTC)
No prob dear LOL
it happens to the best of us.

Glad that you liked my little drabble!
Apr. 21st, 2006 02:50 am (UTC)
Here via Friends of Friends list. :-)

I just wanted to say that I adored this drabble! I kept reading the last line over and over, letting the weight of it kind of sink in. Knowing what happens to Neville's parents makes this little slice-of-life incredibly poignant. Really lovely and really well done! :-)
Apr. 21st, 2006 02:57 am (UTC)
Why thank you. I am glad that you enjoyed it. Always nice to see friends of frineds :)
Apr. 21st, 2006 02:58 am (UTC)


This is so sweet and lovely...

And the last line totally brought in the whole crushing story of the Longbottoms, and reminded me just how much Neville's life has paralleled Harry's. To go from this to the hospital scene in OotP...

Apr. 21st, 2006 03:07 am (UTC)
I have always found the Longbottoms facinating. And the idea that Neville and Harry's lives are built so much on chance and could-have-been's. I find Frank and Alice's situation probably the most heartbreaking of any in the series.

I am glad that you liked it.

(I just couldn't write bathtub porn, it would have been too expected.)
Apr. 21st, 2006 03:43 am (UTC)
I actually was sort of hoping you wouldn't--it would have been too... easy.

And as much as a follow-up to the Darcy/Lizzie bath would be fun... it seems much more in keeping with the original to leave it to the imagination. ;-)

Neville is, in many ways, one of the more compelling characters in the series. I wrote an essay back before HBP in which I theorized that each of the 'second trio' (Neville, Luna and Ginny) was a shadow for one of the original threesome, representing the side of themselves they most hated, but also showing how to transcend that--Ginny starts as the opposite of Ron's image in the Mirror of Erised, overshadowed by her family and disappearing almost literally into the wills of not one but two boys in her first year; Luna is the living epitome of the irrational ability to believe in what cannot be seen that Hermione most fears, yet she turns out to be amazingly insightful; and Neville starts off appearing to be precisely the loser that the Dursleys always told Harry he was--but he turns out to be one of the loveliest, braves characters in the entire series.
Apr. 21st, 2006 03:46 am (UTC)
Wonderful Tory. I actually think you could turn this into a nice little fic if you wanted to.
Apr. 21st, 2006 02:50 pm (UTC)
Thank you kind pirate! I am not sure that I have the heart to turn it into a full blown fic. Too sad :(
Apr. 21st, 2006 10:10 pm (UTC)
Ahhh... but it would be a marvelous prequal to your Neville/Susan fic Beginning to Understand. Sad with a hint of promise.
Apr. 21st, 2006 04:28 am (UTC)
Sweet! Nie little drabble! ;)

On another topic... are you near completeing the Elemental? I need to read that 'Fire' ! ;)

Also -- I am tempted to make a George/Luna icon. Do you have any suggestiosn for images? Should I go for artwork or the actual film actors??
Apr. 21st, 2006 02:53 pm (UTC)
Elemental is finished (the whole thing was finished before I even satrted posting it) but I have to tweak something that one of my beta's found in part four. I am hoping to get that finished tonight and then I will put up the conclusion.

I went with seviet's art work with mine. I, personally would like to see some more fan art as we really don't have Ms. Lynch in full Luna mode yet from the pics I have seen. We NEED more G/L fan art people!!! Spread the word ;)
Apr. 21st, 2006 11:54 pm (UTC)
Using the same artwork -- but a different mani pof it -- I made this one. *points at icon* I searched all over the net for decent luna art and was really disapointed. Either it was 6th grader material, or made luna look TOO wide eyed... Oh well -- seviet - the master - will have to do! ;)
Apr. 22nd, 2006 12:23 am (UTC)
Oh pretty!!!!!!!!!

Nice work!!
Apr. 22nd, 2006 12:41 am (UTC)
Thanks! ;)

I'm anxiously awaiting 'Fire'! *squee*
Apr. 22nd, 2006 03:34 pm (UTC)
It is up now!!!! :)
Apr. 21st, 2006 07:02 pm (UTC)
Oh... the Longbottoms. There aren't many fics about them.

I really liked this drabble. It's sweet and heartbreaking at the same time.
Apr. 22nd, 2006 03:35 pm (UTC)
Thank you I am really glad that you found it so.
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